darko.demark666

Overall, it was a bit confusing. I believe it's about someone who loses the right way and seeks to find it, but can't? It's about me...that was logic, isn't it? ...

[quote="Nate"] The fourth line of the fourth stanza was also odd, and it feels like it was added in just to make that stanza four lines long. I'd just get ...

Accidentally.. I was trying to edit it so i quote it... lol :)

This truth is like a sea [s]that has[/s] no shore, ...with... Original idea... Chaos infinite in heart and mind: That you should once have been, and are no more. without ...

Dialogue -life is pain, pain is life. -but it can be better. -still with 2 edges knife. -write him a peaceful letter -life is weak, weak is life. -you are ...

Put your foot in your mouth, boy; You can't tell me you're sorry. [s]But[/s] I don't care for your lies. I'm over it, over you. So now I smile, Skip ...

I think that there are parts of this poem that definitely need work, but I was in a playful mood this morning, so I decided to write this, in the ...

First of all, I agree with "kissthewitch" about rhyme. The sunset creates a halo on your hair The pieces of my heart shed on my face (end of the line) ...

Submit me your voices, your legend, YOUR LEGEND? Where the God of ancient pillars, Crumbling red stone from his lips, Smiled to his hands, loving, carnivorous. A word, uttered from ...

Last Christmas, Why comma? I trusted you with my heart, I placed it in your hand, And then I wrote you a song… But little did I know, You sold ...

The path I misplaced my happiness so I took the dagger and started searching for that lost treasure. The road that I was on had been covered with trails of ...

Dialogue -life is pain, pain is life. -but it can be better. -still with 2 edges knife. -write him a peaceful letter -life is weak, weak is life. -you are ...

arrogance is no excuse I walked in the halls waltzed , really, Nice idea. But when I first saw this I thought that you consider us(readers) stupid. You could wrote ...

In a year. The world My world If you say "the" world you can't say that this is your world... Or put a comma.. Is rocked back and forth. World---forth--->not ...

She stalks. She springs. And with her brings A breath of midnight air. This verse is doom for rhythm of the poem so far... With prey in jaw She turns ...