darko.demark666

The Romance of Jupiter By Angel of Death You're swept up into an ocean of a cosmic persuasion. The sun orbits around your moonless soul and gravity pushes you away ...

Hi!....welcome to YWS...I think you wont get critique under this section...try in fiction or something like that...;)

...hmmmm...you could post this poem/lyrics/work into the lyrics section... And another thing...Did you try to erase your title in those .."()"...accolades...? I think it'll work much better... 1st sta

Little advice... Try to replace 2nd and 3rd verse...with each other...and the same with two last verses. So...if you're trying to pull the rhyme through the whole poem then do ...

Hola! Now...what happened to punctuation? Nobody (read:rarely) doesn't care anymore for that stuff... What's a footprint? Is that a metaphor for something or? Remove last 2-3 stanzas. It's not pretty ...

Hi! First of all, welcome to YWS... Now the critiques.. Your rhythm scheme is a bit odd. In one verse I see some hope for it and then in another ...

Hi! To tell you the truth right on the beginning; I was thrown back of the computer cause of your spacing, captions and marks... It isn't nice ... But on ...

Love the person that's crazy about you. Love the person that calls you beautiful. Love the person that'd die for you. Love the person that loves you. Love the person ...

Hello...I find your work awesome. I really like the rhythm of this piece. I have just a few critics... You could put some punctuation because this seems too long. 2nd- ...

Rothwise, are you angry at me or what.???.. Please don't review my works anymore... Explosive pen..thank you...I'll correct it as soon as I can.

basically, this cant even be called poetry. Wow, since when are you became E.A. Poe... You can say that, I would rather for you to kick my ass than say ...

Thank you all. I really have problems with those minor mistakes in every my poem....

Okay, first, I'm a she. :lol: Whoops..sorry...

Through every storm and [s]shadow[/s], Through [s]thunder [/s]and through rain; exchange thunder with shadow.... Let my heart be all-enduring, Numbed to every pain. Though blades may [s]dare to[/s] ha

For all those that are in a superior group of people who desn't understand my poems: It's about fear,life,love,sorrow or something like that and usually I am the subject. In ...