darko.demark666

Did someone explained to you what essay should be like? There's no spacing... You're starting the sentences with "and"... Your punctuation should be in order, this is not poetry, here's ...

The Loser by KISBA the seconds pass fast and your heart sings to you low "you will outlast just keep your door closed ..." This isn't a rhyme windows locked: ...

Of an icy chandelier sparkling maliciously in the yellow glow , suspended heavily, mightily in midair. This could be in the same verse? Why did you brake it? Of a ...

I give you one nightmare, a mirage and a daydream :arrow: in that order. Windmills Edge I am walking through barren country. my heart IS heavy , with remorse. I ...

Love Me Little, Love Me Long Love me little, love me long, Is the burden of my song. Love that is too hot and strong Burneth soon to waste. Still, ...

Who? Who, threw the rock, that landed, on Jim? The rock, whose jagged edges, instantly, killed him Or did the rock, throw itself, so consumed, with its spite? And is ...

Thanks for reviews. You helped a lot...

I'm not sure I like the desert snake image... a snake is a particular image in occidental culture, it's evil, and the desert sounds dry and mean... Oh and this ...

I wouldn't want to be rude, but before discussing poetry, you might want to learn how to spell the word "rime" it's "rhythm" that has the Hs and Ys! I'm ...

Moving on: As the time passes by we’re becoming alone ‘cause I’ll here fly and she’ll be gone. • The underlined line is confusing, dear! It's hard to tell what ...

I am new to poetry so please don't be too harsh lol And yes I am Christian. I'm not forcing anything, I'm just expressing my self, not any one else ...

B lack sailed tears are held at bay By armies of smiles during the day, But by night they sneak across the rocks, Balmly accosting to [s]suddenly[/s] abandoned docks. This ...

She's like morning shine after a rough night; she’s everyone’s and mine blissful, white light. Her colors, her look like a desert snake: so mysterious-I’m hooked like a swan in ...

Right now, you're portraying Nature as something demonic, when with just a little tweaking, it could be Nature as a defender. ~Rosey This is just one "element" of nature, wilderness, ...

Welcome to YWS...... ..... .... ... .. . .. ... .... ..... .....sometimes I get carried away... Writers Block My mind, Pinned down, Unable to think, unable to right, Need ...