darkest_of_them_all

:D, me like. Okay, so Borat-speak aside, I thought it was really good! One little thing that looked like it could be improved is that the whole, 'I'm suddenly going ...

*giggles at recent memories of stupidity when in the area of cute guys* I thought it was really cute and agree with the comments from Gryphon and Sam. So, since ...

I read both parts of your story and I think they're really good, especially since a guy is writing them. Of course, this is coming from the person who could ...

I kind of feel like I should be sharpenning some knives and cackling after reading your story. You definitely hooked me right at the beginning. Prokaryote said everything that I ...

I thought this was pretty cool, especially the way you worded the whole thing, it fitted the story I thought. Anyway, here's is just some nit-picky stuff. I hide, across ...

*Insert Dramatic Music Here* Cliffhanger!! Okay, well I seem at a loss as to suggest any changes because I thought it was ammmaaaazzzzzzaaaaazzzzing. And now that I've said that someone ...

Okay so I've packed away my torture devices and therefore I won't be spearing your story, putting it over a fire to roast :P. Since Sam covered a lot of ...

Okay so I think this story definitely has potential, but I agree and disagree with maiko_koto. There are parts in your story that should be separated to enhance the flow ...