dannyr122

My actions are not a cry for help, For if I wanted help I would just ask. I simply care no longer for life, And am too weak to take ...

I have one minor problem with this brilliant poem. “Can nobody hear me?” I shouted “Can nobody hear me?” I screamed . And the world moved on in its deafness ...

Chapter Two Shaheen Ebadi was sat in a prison cell, distraught. He had been expelled from his home at 02:00am the previous morning and had spent the rest of the ...

Thanks for the reviews. I have edited it slightly but decided not to follow it up much as i am busy with a much bigger project called Terror of which ...

Firstly I am sorry to say this poem wasn't really for me. The main problem i can see is that you were trying so hard to make it rhyme some ...

Your story is very good and i like your idea but there are a few errors i think could do with fixing. just kids messing with his head, trying to ...

I like the poem. Very emotional. I just want to point out one or two little errors to make it perfect. Like a lone ship out to see see should ...

I like the poem. Very emotional. I just want to point out one or two little errors to make it perfect. Like a lone ship out to see see should ...

I also don't think it was a short story and rather a descriptive piece but one thing i did like that kept it interesting for me was the use of ...

This chapter is only the initial draft. I want to see what people think so that i can develop the story from here. Chapter One A breeze blew over the ...

I want to start by saying the story and idea are amazing and i think this could be a great poem. But it is let down by one or two ...

I agree with kirstybree that the first stansa makes the poem a hell of a lot more complicated than a poem of this style should be. I also think some ...

I agree with kirstybree that the first stansa makes the poem a hell of a lot more comlicated than a poem of this style should be. I also think some ...

Prologue It was very late and the entire house lay in darkness. The silence that seeped from the house was complete. Nothing moved within its walls. Ben Cartman lay in ...

The first thing to do is explain what you are actually talking about in the poem. What is the invisible enemy and what are you trying to say. The poem ...