danielle17

I had found Marie-Louise and Cassidy outside the dining hall, realised with a sinking heart breakfast was over and then discovered to my delight both my two bestfriends were in ...

gee this is cringy but how do you add new chapters to your sucks being new lol

I liked this because I could really relate to it. Infact, it was scary how much I could relate to it. I love poems with emotion and this poem has ...

Good topic choice. Everyone has been through heartache at some point and the best thing about this is that its easy to relate to. You could have used better grammer ...

I assume this poem is about school? If i'm right I didn't quite understand this part; Never can I leaveto see Mother's sweet face. It confused me a little and ...

I liked it but it was rather confusing, you over detailed some of your points and didn't detail or explain others enough for example; [quoteFinally, I realise it. Finally, I ...

I love this xD!

Brookelyn's POV Today was my fifth year of education, meh. Thankfully this would be my second last year. I'd survived four years in this hell of a private boarding school ...

[quote][Rain. Drenched clothing hung to him, and his tears mixed with the water streaming down his face, dripping from his hair. He walked forward, up the slope./quote] you really feel ...

fourth line confused me, maybe it was typed wrong? The rest of the poem was good though and I understood the jist of it well and i liked some of ...

the emotion in the peom is really good and the fact you repeat 'crying softly' is a good effect and makes the poem all the better. good job.

mmmh...the story rambles on about nothing in particular and if you improved on you sentence structure and your spelling and punctuation your story would improve greatly. I'm struggling to understand ...

you NEED to write more, seriously. This is good as it gets you on the edge of your seat and you left it on a good cliffhanger and its improved ...

It like this :D it was a little rushed though and parts of it were difficult to 'get'. I think you should have detailed it alot more to improve it ...

wow...what a hard hitting topic to write about. I really liked that you were brave enough to choose this topic. I would have been good if the poem was longer ...