dancingclouds

i really enjoyed your poem but the end was a big downer, i was like "is that it?"so do try and fix that. the rest of your poem was great ...

hi dancingclouds here! this is a wonderfully powerful and emotional poem The disease that cintrols you, controls, i think you meant to say The still silence Engraves a sense of ...

hello! dancingclouds here! i really enjoyed reading your poem. it had a lovely flow to it and was easy to read. i love the opening paragraph it really entices the ...

i love the poem but you have to be careful about your spelling as it is distracting and disturbs the lovely flow. try use spell check, its one of my ...

I stood there, watching over my destroyed body. I had a broken bones, stitches in four different places. The whole right side of my body was raw from burn marks. ...

hey! this looks like a great story in the making-please PM me when you post more on! i love your discription of the trianer: " He was at least 6 ...

Chapter 1 I stood there, watching over my destroyed body. The chart on the end of my bed said that I had a broken leg and arm, stiches in four ...

hey! i love your poem but the first paragraph is kind of weak... " I'm always left alone No one cares about me Selfish! All they do is care about ...

The Dance Your simple white dress Floats in and out As you twirl with your dance partner Your delicate face shifts slightly to form a small smile Sending a tiny ...

hey! i love your poem and it has a great title! the first verse is my favorite I'm living in a world Where Iam so misunderstood - I am None ...

hi! i really do like this poem and i love the rhyming scheme! Strong words are said, between the lines, if only you pay attention at the correct times. this ...

hi! This is a brilliant poem, this is the sort of stuff thatpeople should be showing young girls not anorexic, airbrushed blondes! i really like the rhyming scheme through out ...

hi! I really do like your poem but if you expanded your ideas such as your question: "Where are all the things that don't lack simplicity?" I think it could ...

hey! I love your poem , I think it is fantastic! but if you are getting bullied or hurt stop it before it too late... I've been bullied so many ...

hey kayyo! first of all I really do like you poem! I think that if you had the first few lines Quote: Falling down Further and further, Deeper and deeper. ...