damned_bullet93

Hello Ninja-san! Nice story so far, I think this is going to have a good plot. But, I agree with Ink, show us, don't tell us. Probably more description would ...

Hello there, I see you've uploaded a prologue! There it was hanging and gliding back and forth , the villain upside down hanging by a single rope that kept him ...

Actually, I like the opening, the whole philosophy thing about love. But I think you've got to make it less descriptive... You compare a lot too, and that's a bad ...

I'm gonna do a major review on this one. Why? Cause it's my bedtime but I can't sleep. Hope you can... read it... In my sleep, my breathing quickens (CHANGE ...

I really like your imagery, but somehow the words you use doesnt seem to work... The lines are too long, so its very hard to notice the rhyming at the ...

Hello! I'm from the chatroom, so I figured I should review your story. Lol. Okay, here it goes: 1. It's going too fast, yeah sure It's in 1st person but ...