daisyeansell

I think the story has lots of potential, and in that I think it's very good. The grammatical errors are a bit frustrating when reading, also some general comments: "It ...

Intense. Reading it feels like drowning. I think the line "on the sign was written in white ink "Rest In Peace", but the sign itself sighed, said "Rest assured, no ...

I think this poem is great, how ever I have to agree that the first stanza is very choppy. Reading out loud while you write helps with this - its ...