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Lonely Write a poem that brings me warmth in december friends in a school day silence when I dream send me thoughts I can hold to phrases I can dwell ...

I love this stanza, it's beautiful— Lonely handed me a painting I hung it on my wall A painting of a girl just sitting Watching dark red rain fall. BEAUTIFUL. ...

This is awesome! I love this stanza— The clouds hang above, like monsters over the dry ground. They threaten a storm, but she knows better. The last stanza is very ...

I like the rhythm this has—the rhyming seems natural and the line breaks are well done. There are just a few spots that could improve: She sat and scribbled their ...

In the Absence of Love When I look into your eyes and see nothing but the reflected sky when I hold your restless hands and feel only the urge to ...

I love the rhythm this poem has, the line breaks are very well done. I would suggest changing these few lines, I am not cruelty; I am not greed. I ...

I like the ambience this poem has... very crisp and sweet. The ending did seem shaky, the last word sounded repetitive because just a few lines previous you said, "you ...

I didn't really like this, to be perfectly honest. It takes a few readings to make sense of and the rhyming seems unorganized. Your ideas are nice, and I can ...

I agree with what emotion_less said about the poem seeming to be built around the last line--it was a good last line, I'll give you that. The rest of the ...

This is gorgeous-- "wandering, oh To be more like you Behind the barricade we all wish To watch the stars And dance with the night" That last half was really ...

Thank you all so much for the feedback! It means a lot. :D cx

Solitude Come to my heart with a mask of purple, gold and green, come with your twisted candlestick smile, come with kisses and lies and wilted roses and maybe I ...

November’s Child solitude and snowy nights grey leaves in your midnight hair tangled upon your broken shoulders melancholy hazel eyes gentle hands and frozen heart trails of frost down ivory ...

This is nice, it feels very open, very clear. I liked the "sky" and "fly" connection also, it's really cool. Good job! cx

I like this a lot, it has rhythm and character. The length is just right, it keeps the attention and makes an impression. Nice job! cx