crewgurl93

I was sitting outside of the school, reading, when somebody sat down on the ground beside me. “Hey,” he said. “Hi,” I responded. “Do I know you?” he said, not ...

That's pretty good. Keep 'em coming! I would kind of clearify a few things, but that's just me! :P

I'm sorry, but BITE ME!!!! Hisssss! :smt074

cool. watch some of your grammar and punctuation...

It was all right. A great idea atleast. You need to learn to cut out unneccesary words. Honestly, look at the first sentance and tell me that it makes sense. ...

i like it!

This is what I've got so far. Give me suggestions, critiques, tell me like it is. Just don't be too brutal... did u know that u’re all i ever think ...

I really liked it. As for punctuation, I think it's pretty good, but who am I to judge. Personally, I think poetry is about free expression. That includes how you ...

Thank you for your critisism. I realize this poem is quite amature, but I am not an extreemly skilled author, nor do I have enough expierence in poetry to write ...

Real Beauty On the outside, She is plain. The boys don’t stare. The girls ignore her. She is plain. On the inside, She is sane. She listens not To those ...

thank you. this is just a first draft, so it's NOWHERE near perfect. I really didn't notice how Harry Potter-like it was. I don't know whether that's bad or good... ...

thanks

Thank you for the advice.

Thanks for the help! I am updating as we speak! CrewGurl

Thoughts There are some things. There are others. Dreading the next day, Waiting for the time When the world will Stop. My thoughts continue. Leaving me worried, Is one thing ...