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Re: Butterfly
Oh that's pretty! I love the coloring that you did and the shape of the body to the wings. It looks very real. Did you do the background as well ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: The Quarterback
So - I liked this. I like the fact that it's fun and quirky and that we don't really know the fate of the quarterback in the bottle. I also ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Ecstasy - An exercise in simile and metaphor
He enters the room like a king, pulling towards a linen paradise. Their lovemaking is like the parting of the sea. Hot as the zenith. Tiring as apathy. Waves of ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: deleted
I dunno - I really liked the movie. I waited until it was on DVD and didn't see it in the theaters. The White Queen fit with being insane, as ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: *looks out nervously* Hello...
Let us have hats and be Mad Hatters. :D
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: Rain
Hey AutumnSun. Your poem is very nice. It has good imagery but it feels too much like a blob of text. You need punctuation and breaks in the stanza. I'm ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: 1 wish
The wish to live without fear, is a wish that seems so mear. I love this little part. It is my favorite part of the entire poem. You've taken, in ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: *looks out nervously* Hello...
Well.... :twisted: Maybe just once or twice. You got me on this zombie thing. Or I got you on it. Either way, we're all mad.
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: *looks out nervously* Hello...
Meep! *is glomped* I hope so. Otherwise you're in for it. ;) Ooo Elephant! *hugs it* It shall be my Squishy.
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: *looks out nervously* Hello...
Hi! I'm Liz/crescentgaia and I'm a bit shy about making intros. I'd just like to say that Tatra got me over here and it's all her fault. I'm probably going ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: With Eyes Alone
I agree with the comments about the stanzas needing to flow better. It does feel like a bit of a jerky movement or like gasping for breath. yes, i've finally ...
Jun 27, 2010
