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I can see, like you said, your problem with tenses. You have to decide if you want to write it in past or present tense, because I don't know which ...

Hello there. I love the symbolism/metaphors in this poem. It was lovely. Hope the writer's block stays away! (not here to review)

Awwww.... That's a really cute cover. Most novel covers have the title and the author's name together though. I like the picture, but I think that you should move the ...

Grammar: Since her death, the start of every Spring broke my heart. Shouldn't be capitalized. He and I were separated by some imagined wall from since I could walk or ...

Since her death, the start of every Spring broke my heart. Shouldn't be capitalized. He and I were separated by some imagined wall from since I could walk or talk. ...

Her legs!!! They're bending towards the left and make her look like a macaroni noodle! And are also a bit too short in proportion to the body. I like the ...

Hello. First off, I'd like to say I love the shading. I personally am GIMP-challenged, but it looks like she's wearing foundation, and it's awesome. On the outline itself, the ...

I would force myself up, in search of the bathroom, where extra- stregth Tylenol would be hiding in medicine cabinets, pop three pills in my mouth without water and go ...

I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt. Perhaps these were all typos and you didn't have enough time to revise? As for the story itself, there isn't ...

Maybe I'm demented or abnormal, but I found your cliche love story hilarious. I can see what you mean by this story being cliche. Girl is madly in love with ...

I like the general concept of the paintings and the symbols you decided to associate with each of the words, but I think you could add more shading and details. ...

His stare broke within seconds, but I couldn’t take my sight off of him. *eyes-sight doesn't make much sense here. This is an interesting idea. I love the whole pill=vivid ...

"A little bludlust are you, Miss?" Nigel laughed as I dragged Romeo into the carriage. * blood-lust I have not killed a human, but if you would like to meet ...

Wow, this is an intense novel. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. I haven't read the previous ones, but your writing is really captivating. The characters are very well characterized ...

Okay, so let me get this straight. The girl's name is Fiel and she couldn't see at the beginning of the chapter because of all the fog and couldn't move ...