crazy_lil_blondie

I like this. The message is simple yet so true for society today. There is one thing that's bothering me though, and that is the rhyming scheme. Or lack there ...

I just have to say....Wow. I LOVED it! I think the choppy sentences fit well with this story, because I know from experience that when you have a MAJOR crush ...

I liked the plot, and the pretense of the story. However. [there's always one! :P] The thing that threw me off several times was that you switch tenses in the ...

"What do you mean I'm going to... be.... LATE?" he said after looking at his clock. "Oh crap! Not again! They're going to kill me!"he moaned. Quickly grabbing his clothes ...