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Honestly Zib I can only do my own charecters personatily. It's one of my writer flaws.

Ok can anybody say SUSPENSE!!!! My thing is, however, that this doesn't make much sense as a proluge. Usually proluges sets up something that will happen later in the story. ...

Demon I extended his claws angrily. Where were my soilders? Digging deep into his wolve senses he sniffed the air. Scarlett Fire. Just because she was part Lyken didn't mean ...

I am hooked! I think this is very good and possibly addicting. If you think it should be a TV show turn it into a script. ( that was my ...

Writer's note: ( If you have read The Hunger Games you can skip this!)There are 12 districts, overruled by a cruel capitol. To maintain order of the districts the Capitol ...

I love stories that take classic stories and turn the bad guy good! I think this is a cute and really good. Everybody else covered the grammer and things so.... ...

*Sabrina* I slammed down on the breaks as a stupid pickup truck swerved in front of me, jerking back my head. Gritting my teeth I swerved around the truck taking ...

Only one thing: how'd you get the bumble bee? I havn't reviewed any art yet but I'll see what I can do! You pictures are really pretty and you picked ...

I think you have a nice start and a good beginnig. My revisions would be these: * Do what skutter11 taught you with grammer. it makes things alot easier to ...

Hey Brookie I love the idea of this story but I got confused by the dialouge. When having a conversation you should go more like this: " I'm sorry Mom", ...

Here's a last final Elder ( thanks forsakin for letting me add him!) Name: William Age:(Looks Early 50's real age 5,982) Gender: Male Type: Elder Appearance: ( couldn't get pic) ...

AMAZING!!!! I truly think you did - are doing Pandora great justice. I love charecter rewrites and mythology. If you write more please PM me!!!!!! You do a good job ...

Name: Sabrina Age: Looks: 18 real age:147 Gender: Female Type: Genetic Appearance: Choppy black hair an inch below her shoulders. Faded gray eyes with long lashes. She has red rimmed ...

Thanks for the opions guys! I understand what your saying and I'll try to fix it. I didn't describe the forest much because this is the only time in the ...

Chapter one-Holly I am so sick and tired of waiting around, stuck here being something I'm not. Nobody asks me what I want to do- I want to fight. Holly ...