confetti

When Aiden dropped a trio of plates on the floor, - the ceramic exploding into a million broken pieces, embedding into Aiden's foot like shrapnel from a bomb - Nina ...

It ended with a funeral. Good opening line. Simply, straight-forward, defining. I like the idea of the repetitive beginnings to the opening paragraphs - "There was", but the phrasing itself ...

I liked the beginning bit right off the bat. It was interesting and free from ranting. Your story feels like it's getting better and better with each passing chapter. was ...

Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive. *all right. Sorry, just had to correct you! Alright isn't accepted like altogether is. *It felt ...

Hello m'dear, I finally got free time, and so here I am. Nitpicks first. I took a deep breath, and had a coughing fit that very second Awkwardly phrased It ...

My dear, I am so sorry for how long it's taken me to get to this. And so, thanks a million for the patience. It's been a long week. So, ...

Hola, sorry it took me a bit to get to this. I know you said I don't have to review the first couple chapters, but I'd like to anyways. I'll ...

I'm sorry that it's taken so long for me to get to this! I've been real busy lately, but I'm here now. I was wondering though, this must not be ...

"Oh no! I'm so late!", I yelped as I frantically rushed to put on my new low-ankle beige coloured socks. Trust me when I say, we don't care about what ...

I like this, really, but I feel that the rhyming ruined it. As soon as I got to the last line of the first stanza, I stopped taking this poem ...

The first thing I noticed was that you're changing tenses quite a bit. Perhaps today will be the day. vs. I trudged my way into the band room. The first ...

Pavo wasn’t all that surprised when he woke up. However, he was absolutely puzzled as to the fact that he was still alive. These two sentences contradict each other. I ...

I think this story of your is definitely the best thing featured right now. Don't tell anyone I said that. Benji caught a bird yesterday. Someone once told me dogs ...

I read a couple chapters last night, but I was too tired to review them. The immediate thing I noticed is how fast the story is moving now. It had ...

Good evening. While reading this, I realized that there was nothing to nitpick - honestly, nothing. Which is crazy because I can usually find a nitpick in anyone's writing. So, ...