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When Humphrey woke after nine days at sea, it was still early and wet hot. "wet hot" doesn't seem like proper grammar. I toyed around with it in my head, ...

This needs paragraphs. When a new person speaks, you create a new paragraph. Otherwise, it's a huge turn-off. If you do that and you'd like me to do a thorough ...

Seems like the person who reviewed this first is trying to convert you to the non-american way of spelling things (you know, all the times "u" was added). That really ...

Good evening, could you take a look at this piece? Been waiting for a review for bit, I figured I'd go and get one, thanks!

Phantom blue eyes looked up at her as she caressed her pale fingers over the flawless skin. She blew him a silent kiss; as her grey eyes took him in ...

Reviews would be much appreciated! I would love to know if you understood the idea behind it, I'm not sure if I made it clear enough, but I wanted it ...

(Read spoiler first) I'm quite fond of the plot, and I don't feel like it needs a whole lot of work, but I'm not 100% sure about the writing. Especially ...

Not my favourite work of yours, and I will explain why in a bit. "Esteban!" Rolling footfalls up the stairs preceded Esteban's wheezy entry. "Yes si-" he began, before his ...

I looked at my cereal, then pushed it away. I wasn’t in the mood to eat, let alone go to school, but luckily it was the end of the week, ...

The walls are rising. The words are flying. The light is dying. Along with all we used to be. The punctuation in this stanza is fine until the last line. ...

I can't really give you any tips, I'm not much of a photographer myself, but I liked these. They look like the sort of pictures that would be default desktop ...

Good evening m'dear. Nitpicks and such first: “…she swung that sword around as skillfully as a great knight in battle. Damn near took my eye out mind you.” My uncle’s ...

Any good book, really. But to be specific, I think John Green's books. I just love his style.

I liked this, it's so full of venom that you can't help but feel the emotion. It's short, but not quite simple. Nice work, sorry I couldn't be of any ...

My feet couldn’t carry me fastest fast enough through the Brady High hallway and down the left stairs The left stairs? Unimportant detail. No one cares if it was the ...