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I ran around in aimless circles, dancing with them and watching them blink. I would change the second dancing to something else - twirling, perhaps? You've already said you're dancing, ...

Things in blue are only suggestions, but you should still consider taking the advice. Read the spoiler for my nitpicks. To Heather, from Luke. If I might make a suggestion, ...

You may want to go back and check out the memory. The [i ]' and '[/ i]' didn't quite work ;) She drew it open, feeling her heart beat . ...

1:34 a.m: The dark figure enter ed the room. Everywhere else, you write in past-tense, so do the same here. That's my only nitpick. I really liked this, short, simple, ...

I know this is supposed to be written the way a text is, but let's get real, no one texts like this. Even people that text like "hey bb sup ...

It's neat how each paragraph, although it looks similar to the last, is different in it's own way. One paragraph talks of happiness, while the other talks of the opposite. ...

7/10 muy guapa

" (delete the space here) I never want this to end " H aha Todd! You're talking as if it was the last time we'd see each other! " I ...

Not sure how I feel about this story, but I would love some reviews on it. I hope that no one is offended by this story, I know religion can ...

I like the front cover, minus the font you used. It's a big of an obnoxious font, and the title hardly fits on the page. I would suggest something more ...

7/10 I suppose

I'm not going to comment on any grammatical errors, because they're very slim, and hardly important. What I did want to say is that I find that you change tenses ...

I wasn't really feeling the first two, but I liked the third one, and I really liked the last one. Cheers

This review is mostly going to be about grammar. stuff in blue are suggestions stuff in red are things you really should change stuff in green are my comments I ...

The picture if very lovely, but I'm not really feeling the quote. It's one that I have heard too many times before.