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Roots rose from the frozen water like hands on a clock that had come to rest with the sudden freezing of the water, Er ... what? It doesn't make sense. ...

Actually, he's the hunter, and one of the two main characters. Thanks for your input, I'll most likely apply your first editing suggestion.

The start of a piece I never finished. It's actually a sequel, I'd like thoughts/opinions on what I should do with it. The skeleton branches danced as shadows against the ...

Thanks for the useful review! I recently got like 5 more poetry ideas to do tonight, but I'll definitely consider writing another pieced based upon the last few lines of ...

I really loved this -for many reasons. You did a great job in taking on a different style of writing than most teenagers do. It's much more metaphorical, and flows ...

It paints a nice picture for sure, I felt it could've been more personal, more emotional. But it isn't bad at all! I was emotionally hurt enough at the time, ...

Wow, thanks James. I think you went a little far with analyzing it, but that's good. I like that someone is actually taking my imagery into mind. :) I like ...

I love the rain, therefore I like this poem. Good job. -Shear (Sorry for being unhelpful but when I see a poem I like, I have to at least comment ...

This poem is really .. beautiful. It seems like you find comfort and serenity in the rain. I like that. The rain restores and renews things. I do indeed love ...

Thanks guys. I appreciate it. :)

Slow and steady The rain falls Eyes of pane glass Drops glide past Lightning strikes serenity The wind howls with wisdom Eyes of pane glass Drops glide past Pollen over ...

I love this. It's simply amazing, a great example of a true heartbreak. The metaphors you use seem well thought-out, even if they did come naturally to mind. Keep writing. ...

Wow, this is amazing. There's only one part that kind of confused me: tell separate sad, but happy, tales. I know there's a word for this, but I can't place ...

Amazing story, great twist at the end. I really liked it and can't wait until you finish your next story, I'm sure it'll be just as good if not better. ...

Overall it's good, I really like the beginning. I'm going to point out some little things I think you could improve. :) I was lying, and a second ago, face ...