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"She owned nothing more clothing than that regulation slip;" No more clothing----No clothing other then that regulatio slip "sexuality limbo, your intimate parts removed and replaced with snap on pros

“Not too shabby, eh?” he said, as he eyed the menu –with the word La Mar printed on the front, in big, silver, bold letters- the receptionist had handed to ...

Could you possibly go into more detail on the angel? Is she really gorgeous? Or more alien, since she's not human. If his wife dies does the angel live? and ...

Who's Jonny Jay? The beginning was a little confusing, love the "Hang me Barbie" box idea. Beck seems more angry than sad. Like she resents that Stacy "hanged" what conditon ...

You kind of jump around the tenses, and that gets confusing. [quote="Madhatter66"]...who nick named me The Devils Advocate, mainly because I wore a black pole neck jumper, black business coat. ...

i like the book, and the fact that he started young the real reason i even read it was because of the dragons dragons are cool he said he wrote ...

I have to try and find something wrong with Snoinks story? this will be tough.lol "He tried to swipe her face or arms, but in a minute, his face blue, ...

i really liked the way the masks showed her emotion. the way you described the masks made me really see them not just read about them other then the clarity ...

:shock: WOW that was awosme and your voice isnt bad the only part i didnt like was when you hold the ending of the first verse(your leaving me behiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiind" but ...

my word....time for another joke hillary dies and goes to the pearly gates where michael is checking clocks hillary asks "what are all of the clocks for" michael says "the ...

Its very hard to follow...its too quick, not fast paced action quick, no description or development quick. I personally like to see the plot happen. Also parenthesies are a bad ...

:arrow: i like the violent bloody stories...or this one anyhow, maybe make it more descriptive, for example you said there were dogs in his house where were they? were they ...

:arrow: i liked it, maybe speed up the action in the beginning, i like fast stories its a wierd thingy about me, but i loved the end, ecspessially the kiss ...

"He downed it in one gulp and proceeded to wipe the crimson moustache off his face with a frail stemmy green arm." that line is awsome~! lol g very imaginative ...