colourless-rainbow

ohhh that made me laugh. I don't think I have any crit really, but I wanted to let you know how much I liked it.

oh this is great. I'm loving it. There were a few bits that felt too wordy, and I still feel that you need to settle on how your individual characters ...

Wow. I really liked that. I think it got stronger as you got further into chapter one and two. You maybe need to re-read the start of chapter one and ...

The prologue and chapter one of my novel (novella?) All the Shades of Grey. Although this is PG-13 for language at the moment, it will probably be R by the ...

Ohhh that's awful. I'm sorry. I deeply respect you for feeling able to share this to be honest. It sounds almost callous to start talking about the quality of your ...

The class then shut there mouths and sat down. should be their . He was in his late thirties but looked around forty-five. How? Describe this to us. Show us. ...

Oh that was good. You've got me hooked. There are a few typos in there that need sorting, but they'll be pretty obvious if you give this a read-through. I ...

haha. that made me smile. Is this going to be stand-alone or part of something bigger? Only crit I have - the characters feel a little flat. Though, to be ...

He looked over his shoulder as he turned the corner, catching the eye of one of the men, whose grin disturbed him greatly. This is an instance where I think ...

To ChernobyllyInclined: Yes but, don't humans generally seem to be much more interested in the darker stuff than the positives? For example, the media: very rarely is there anything positive. ...

Nah, I've just finished AS levels, but, my birthday being in August, I'm still only 16. I'm the baby of the year *sobcrysob* Oh, and I *love* long walks too ...

I think as far as the crit of the mechanics of the writing goes, it's been said already. However, I'm a little confused about the time. You mention the fiasco ...

hey =] I write mainly romantic and fantasy faction (or a mixture of both). You? Yeah, I used to use a board similar to this one, but for younger people, ...

EDIT I'm going to continue this on the advanced crit. forum. Being a newbie, I didn't realise there was one. So if you want to read more, please head over ...

Ooh, intriguing. I'd love to see more of this. It does need some brushing up of basic grammar points (new line for a new person's speech) and checking up of ...