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hey, no, its fine...its really long it looks like its been repeated (= no worries :D xoxo bee

ugh. tense problems. i always have those. thanks very much for all your time and help and comments and critiques! (= I'll make those changed. thakns for reading!!

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I just stand there and observe this. My husband is telling me that Sara--the main threat in my life and his ex--is going to be his personal servant, catering to ...

At dinner, Jack is the only one who talks much. After a while he just shuts up and keeps glancing at us all, clearly wondering what's up. Finally he sets ...

none of them are virgins lol...but the bloody sheets was a funny idea (= its just not going to fit with this story i don't think..but thanks (= what do ...

thanks guys. yes, all critiques are VERY appreciated i know it needs alot of work. its not in England..its set in this madeup place..Chrissiera...i hate the name. its just a ...

thank you!!!! (= i know i need to work on the grammar...thanks (= I will keep going haha yeah its got a little Princess Diaries, little Cinderella, little Gilmore Girls ...

I'd like to join...the forum hasn't been created yet? btw this is a dumb question but: how do you post your writing? just enter it on a forum topic...?[/quote]