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hey, no, its fine...its really long it looks like its been repeated (= no worries :D xoxo bee

ugh. tense problems. i always have those. thanks very much for all your time and help and comments and critiques! (= I'll make those changed. thakns for reading!!

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I just stand there and observe this. My husband is telling me that Sara--the main threat in my life and his ex--is going to be his personal servant, catering to ...

At dinner, Jack is the only one who talks much. After a while he just shuts up and keeps glancing at us all, clearly wondering what's up. Finally he sets ...

Chapter 1: I'm feeling very urban right now. I'm standing here in front of our new house in New York City watching the cab from the airport drive off and ...

none of them are virgins lol...but the bloody sheets was a funny idea (= its just not going to fit with this story i don't think..but thanks (= what do ...

thanks guys. yes, all critiques are VERY appreciated i know it needs alot of work. its not in England..its set in this madeup place..Chrissiera...i hate the name. its just a ...

I'm sure this is a great story...but its red, no capitalization, not enough punctation, no paragraphs. i cannot read one long, uncapitalized, RED story. i know i know im probably ...

thank you!!!! (= i know i need to work on the grammar...thanks (= I will keep going haha yeah its got a little Princess Diaries, little Cinderella, little Gilmore Girls ...

I just have to say that I love this and I can't wait for more. I'm fourteen and I like to act too, so that made me happy. The story ...

I was never one for marriage. I’m a free spirit and fun is usually first on my priority list. Therefore, being married for me would be tantamount to Harry Houdini ...

hey! im Bethani and I'm new here. still figuring out how to post stuff meanwhile cleanup dog pee..fun right? anyhow I'm fourteen, black/African-American whatever, like to act and dance, Christian, ...

I'd like to join...the forum hasn't been created yet? btw this is a dumb question but: how do you post your writing? just enter it on a forum topic...?[/quote]

I just joined about ten minutes ago. I like to write fiction. I'm fourteen. Black. Christian. Homeschooled. Live in America--Washington DC. Like to act and dance...can't think anything more. about ...