cmarie159

I want to die, I want to cry, to feel closer to you. Every inch of my body is held down in agony, and the weight of gravity brings me ...

I think that you have something here, but you might want to work on the overall structure of the poem. It was enough to keep my attention from wandering, but ...

I agree with the punctuation, there needs to be some. The poem has a good rhythmic pattern. I really like the last line, about what's on your mind? don't you ...

I actually love the simplicity of this. there's probably improvement to be made here, but there IS something to be said about simple statements. it's back to the roots, in ...

Welcome to Chanelmarie's tour of the unknown, buckle your seatbelts and... oh shoot, wrong speech card! *shuffles* Ah, here we go. My name is Chanelmarie, and I will play the ...

I really liked this concept, the whole thing about the bad being within us. I found this rather witty, kind of reminding me a bit of clive barker. now i'm ...

So, here's a novel idea: I'm just going to take the past and put it in a neat little shoe box, maybe from Aldo or ADIDAS. I'll put every single ...

I am waiting. I am dreaming of days when the validity of happiness is no longer questioned. My dreams are filled with the kind of euphoria that can only be ...

This is for a contest by Vernon, personifying a bed. I thought I'd give it a shot ;]. Tell me what you think. Hush, baby, hush , my bedsprings whisper. ...

(Note: this is a story less about the fantasy, and more about the development of people, as most of my stories are. Excuse the fact that the French written in ...

Wow, this was, wow. I kind of almost started crying over that. The sad thing is, I think it's more than one in six. It's the fact in high school ...

This was pretty good. Truthfully though, I found myself staring into space, just like the character. The first paragraph was pretty good, and so was the second, but after it ...

This was AMAZING! True, there are some spelling and grammatical errors, but I got into this so much I forgot about them! Some things could be a little more clear, ...

This piece threw me off a bit, I was imagining that the invisible force was something a little more internal. Maybe it is? I don't know. I definitely agree with ...

haha so um, guess who hit the reply button this time? =D This was absolutely amazing. I thought the not leaving the paint to dry thing was awesome. You are ...