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"thin, bloody heap. The heap..." - You could just swap 'the heap' for it: "Thin bloody heap. It was..." blond in line 2 should be blonde - something we got ...

Sorry, not a fantasy character for me. The daughter of a pair of polish immigrants circa 1990, her first name anglicized to make it easier for her classmates to pronounce, ...

Granted thus-ly: It does, as does every other piece of work you ever have to do. Eventually, as a famous author you are invited to give a seminar on your ...

Granted, but the ultimate knowledge thus gained is too much for your mortal frame and your mind becomes unhinged, opening a gate into hell and leading to armies of ravishing ...

Granted, but you never sleep again. With no dreams, your creativity withers and dies and you end up working for the marketing department of...oh...Microsoft. I wish that all the guns ...

This may get an awful response. But basically, this: You have 2 minutes (time yourself) to write as much as you can, coherently , on the subject given at the ...

granted, but in the wake of their destruction the Teletubbies grow a 5th and 6th member and expand to take their TV slots, greater and more terrible than ever before. ...

easy... granted, but for 100 years. Your castle, m'lady, is overgrown with rosebushes and brambles, and the prince who comes to rescue you has a weak chin and a horribly ...

Purely as a small point, he could here the iranians running through the trees after Mistake: 'here', here, should be 'hear'. (I couldn't resist that. Sorry.) One is a verb, ...

Well thanks for everything... Claudette, I know we're not supposed to reply to crits, but hey: In my defence, only three of those words were adverbs, pearly is an adjective. ...

For the record, RADA stands for Royal Academy of Dramatic Art. It's an English dramatics it probably has no place in the story, but I couldn't think of another one ...

I like it. Is it part of anything longer? On to the crit.... If you ever do that again, I wont come for you Should be won't. You get it ...

On a random tangent, did you know where the phrase "It was a dark and stormy night" comes from originally? Ironically, it was penned by the great Bulwer-Lytton (try wikipedia...) ...

Done. That'll teach me to copy and paste straight from microsoft word... :D