chocolatechipmuffin

I would also break up the lines. I get the "wet wings of a butterfly," when butterflies first come out of their cocoons, their wings are wet, they can't fly. ...

I've never had to wear a uniform (yay for american public schools!), but some of my friends went to Catholic elementary schools, and my mom was at Catholic schools until ...

You know, I have always secretly kind of hated that play. Because, honestly, dying really doesn't send out a romantic vibe for me. You could try...oh! He's actually only there ...

I love Robert Frost, he would be great...try "On Going Unnoticed," it's a study of the grandeur of the forest, and man's place in the world. Also, William Blake, who's ...

I like that. You incorporate Orthodoxy into everything you write, don't you? :P I guess we all write what we know... I liked the idea, but Gabriel--Oh! I just got ...

:D I am a grammar Nazi...I point out grammar mistakes no matter what (okay, I make exceptions for stilistic effects :) ). It bothers my friends sometimes, but they know ...

My school sells carnations for Valentine's, you buy in advance, they deliver, sometimes anonymously. My guy friend who has had a crush on me for four years (and who's been ...

Dear Just Me, Buy a cell phone. Super-glue it to your ear. If you don't want to talk to someone, hold up a finger and say "I'm busy." Oh, and ...

Dear chocolatechipmuffin, Remember me? You know, the girl you haven't written about forever? YOU LEFT ME AT A FREAKIN' CLIFFHANGER FERCHRISSAKES!!! I mean, I can cope with the terrible life ...

The Rule Everyone must take gym. The Reason It keeps the fat kids in shape. The Truth Gym teachers belong to a secret agent organization that is constantly looking for ...

"A pen, maybe. I like to write poetry. Or maybe my worry stone, which is actually a shell I picked up on the beach a few years ago. No, probably ...

Your baby sister sounds lovely, but I agree with Colleen, the descriptions aren't unique, they're almost cliche. Look at each description, and think about how else you can say it. ...

Angels float down, bearing gifts from on high Poets of the world collectively sigh as spirals of words drift into their heads and stay there forever, keeping Poets from beds. ...

My faces scared and broken look, This makes very little sense to me, I get the idea of what you were trying to say, but the incorrect grammar bothers me. ...

I liked it, I got an image of a boy/man who has no direction in his life, whose goals have all gone away. You do need to put in some ...