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Ooh... she was protected! Cool. I love how you have a flashback in each chapter. I will go and read number 5 now!

Yes! I knew it! She's pregnant! I think this is a really cool story. Please update it soon.

Nice cliffy. I only noticed one mistake. You wrote loose. It's actually lose. Again, is she pregnant?

Nice. Is she pregnant?

This was nice. I liked seeing it from Corrie's POV. Didn't exactly like how you showed the dialouge. It just didn't seem like a diary entry to me. Otherwise it ...

Hey! Another great chapter. I'm still a little confused about what this guy did to Vivi? Mind explaining? Otherwise I loved it. I get what you mean about the taping ...

Definetly short, but I liked it. This chapter was straight to the point, but had enough emotion in it to make you feel sorry for the girl. Update soon!

So this chapter wasn't just for me. Aw... I'm sad now. But It was great. There's no way you're not finishing this story! I want it completed or you will ...

This was sweet. I didn't expect what happened in the end. I thought the woman was just the wind.

This was a random piece. I liked it. But I had no idea where it was going. Maybe you should try and make that more clear in future. Also, there ...

Nice. It was sweet and funny. I liked it better than I liked the first one. I loved th last line. Is there more coming?

This was good. There wa sonly thing I didn't like. In the first paragraph you say that it's a two story house twice. I think this is un nessacary. Otherwise ...

This was interesting. I don't really read much fantasy, but from the little fantasy stories I've read, this was really cool.

I edited this a bit! Tell me what you think!

Yay! A sequel! This answered some questions, but I'd still love more. Sorry, I just always want more. But yeah, this was interesting.