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Yeah, haikus are 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. So I'd fix these.

I'm not sure if people have said these or not, but here they are.... Gives You Hell in your pants Let It Rock in your pants Girl Next Door in ...

On the whole, I kind of like this poem. Its rhythm is strange, but it still seems to flow, in a simplistic way. However, you definitely need to add punctuation ...

Lalaith Nyxe answered me vaguely, her head drooping back as sleep overcame her. I left her where she was, then wandered out into the camp. A few elves were out, ...

*I'm going to be gone for 3 or 4 days, because I'm going out of town again. Sorry, but I might not post for awhile.*

I like the concept of this poem. It is interesting, and the way you wrote it is good. There are a few errors though. I changed around the line breaks ...

Spencer A middle-aged man who is king of a different planet, but humorous and slightly arrogant. He has red-gold hair and a fiery temper.

God I hate history. My US history class is sooo boring. But one of my closest friends and the guy I like both love history, so I deal with it. ...

Lalaith "I was alive for the final battle, but I didn't fight, though I wish very much that I had. My family made me flee, because I said I wouldn't ...

Lalaith "Of course I fight against the men. I don't live in this tiny camp on the mountain because it is enjoyable. I do it because it is away from ...

This poem has a good message, and is very straight forward. It is simple, but in a good way. Now for the critiques. - "tearful eyes fear within trembling souls ...

(I may not post for a few days because I'm going out of town. Just thought I should say that. And as to the Dreamwalker, I have no idea. It's ...

Lalaith Carrying the elf was easy, because elves were so naturally light weight. I knew that if I took her back to my home, she would be healed much more ...

(Okay.) Lalaith One second my back was turned, listening intently for the pursuer. The next, the injured elf was gone, stolen away by Constance, who I saw dashing towards to ...

Ok, first off, welcome to YWS! Second, nice poem. it flows well and has a good concept. There are a few things that need fixing, though. - "It's the reason ...