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I like the new title, Midnight Vampire. And I really like this poem altogether. I read the version you had before you edit it, and now that it is edited, ...

Thank you all! By "plains of china" I meant china as in porcelain china, the kind they make plates out of, not the country. And plains like the plains of ...

(I don't write a whole lot of poetry, so I hope this is okay! And does anyone have any ideas about punctuation for it?) Fields of cherry (specked with gold) ...

This is really good. It flows well and isn't so puzzling that people don't even want to read it, but just enough so that people want to think about it ...

There are a few spelling errors, such as 'flaring', 'manes', and 'throw'. Definitely fix those. Maybe fix up the rhyme scheme a bit too, so there is a pattern and ...

As for the punctuation, I would actually pattern it like this: First line. Second Line Third Line; Fourth Line. Other than that, it was great. Nice job.

This is a good idea, but there are a few easily fixable errors. Infodumps, as others have mentioned, shouldn't be used. A few grammatical errors, and some punctuation problems, need ...

This poem is actually pretty good. It reminds me of poems by E. E. Cummings (who is my favorite poet). He also makes use of phrases in parenthesis. I've always ...

(I'm sorry if there are a few scattered grammatical errors. I haven't revised it completely yet, and I really just want critiques on the characters, plot, setting, and writing style. ...

Talk with your characters. I know it sounds odd, but I have conversations in my mind all the time with my characters. That way, when I write about them, I ...

Wow, that is really good. For such a short piece, it has so much meaning. I mean, it leaves questions in your mind, such as "what was hitting the earth? ...

I really like the idea you have here. As I read, I wanted to find out more about how the "tagging" worked and what the characters were going to do. ...

This poem is very creative. You can really get a sense of dread as you read it. It also seems like there is a deeper meaning to the words, or ...