chipsandguacamollie

I probably sleep too much. TPBM only writes fantasy.

Banned for being the same age as me.

I think, like Sleeping Valor said, you should just write what comes to you. I personally find writing the beginning of a story to be much more difficult than the ...

Okay, this is killing me. You are switching tenses in this story, which is one of my biggest writing pet peeves! So first off, decide if you are telling this ...

Hi! I'm Mollie, Or Gucamollie, or Chipsandguacamollie if you prefer, and I am here to review, so please, post your links, and I will review them usually within the day, ...

Banned for trying to be perfect.

8/10 It's cute, and it makes me laugh. :D

Banned for banning without a reason.

I had never really expected anything to happen between my best friend Carl and I. We'd been so close, I had thought that if we ever went any further than ...

Aunt Leona was here. She was never here except when she needed my parents’ assistance with family matters. T his sentence is kind of awkward. Maybe change the "She was ...

The concept of this story is something I haven't thought about before, which is why I like it. It's original and thoughtful. I do have a few minor critiques though. ...

Multiple first-person narration can get confusing, but personally, I like it, because it gives different views on a story. But also, as Bickazer said, you have to have a reason ...

This happened to me with my novel, so I just took a break from it. However, if you can't seem to write anything, I'd advise that you just do some ...

The sunset drips over the hill, A blaze of red, orange and pink, Nice imagery here. Silhouetting the trees. A bird flies in the distance, Trying, trying to get home, ...

Ooh fun! She's a tall, thin blond, with stick-straight hair pulled into a tight ponytail, and downcast green-blue eyes. Her nose is overly large, and she looks sad, though she ...