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I'm not a huge sports person, and I never would have guessed that's what those are. So 6/10.

(I could be way wrong) This sounds either like a romance novel, with a lot of heartbreak, or a girl recovering from some traumatic event. A close friend of family ...

Jesse, Jenny, or Jayden. Definitely something starting with J. Kind of tall, lanky teenage boy. He has wild, purplish hair and fair skin. His eyes are dark, but always sparkling. ...

(For Rosey Unicorn's contest, I wrote a quick poem about fire.) I coax to life a flicker of strife. In the endless depths a battle is set. Brave soldiers await ...

(Just something I wrote quickly in health class. Once again, I'm not sure on the punctuation.) A monk meditates in the morning light His smooth arms crossed, refusing to fight. ...

A large platter of fancy sushi, or a bunch of colorful paper lanterns. chipsandguacamollie

This is amazing! And really funny. I can't wait to see more of your drawings!

I really do love this. The whole idea of the angels, and Katie being kind of goth is great. You do have some typos to fix, and I really do ...

(Once again, I am not sure how to punctuate it, so I would really appreciate some feedback on that, especially for the first stanza. Thank you for reading!) (edited) Hatred ...

This is good for a prologue, though a bit short. It draws you in and makes you curious about what happened to this person. You do have some errors though. ...

I think the edited version does flow better. It is simple and to the point, but well written too. You can immediately relate to the subject of the poem, the ...

This is a good poem. Creepy, funny in an odd way, satirical, and ironic. I do have two small critiques though. 1. "We wouldn’t want you sleeping well;/that really ruins ...

I can't believe how much I enjoy reading this. It has a fantastic plot, great characters, and is amazingly well written. There are a few small errors though. Whenever you ...

Wow. This poem is just amazing. And I think every minor detail that is just slightly off has already been nit-picked at, besides one thing. When you say, "Where the ...

I agree one hundred percent with Midnight Vampire, besides the fact that there is nothing to edit, because I found one thing to critique. The bit with Kirun's sister seems ...