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Lalaith I leaned against a large rock at the base of a tree. The forest was quiet at this time of day, only allowing the soft songs of birds to ...

Can I still join? I hope so, because you said 15 characters maximum and there are only 10 slots taken, so I'll post a profile... NAME: Lalaith Clearstone GENDER: Female ...

This is good. I like the metaphor, because it is different, and I think you really made the comparison make sense. I have a few small critiques though. "as its ...

Um, this isn't really a poem, and I'm not sure how to critique it. Did you put this under the wrong category?

1. IF SOMEONE SAYS 'ARE YOU OKAY?' YOU SAY? Shadow of the Day That sounds kind of depressing... 2. HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE YOURSELF? Man! I feel like a woman! ...

I think this poem is great. It expresses what it is like for gay people very well, if a bit dramatically. The rhyme scheme is simple, but good. I do ...

No... It's Boys and Girls, actually. I'm listening to it on Itunes right now.

"Yes, I used to, whenever I was nervous. It became a kind of habit..." ~Claire "Um... No." ~James "Yeah, right. I've never seen a guy my age chew their nails. ...

First off, since you seem relatively new, welcome to YWS! I really like this piece. I'm really into any sort of utopian/futuristic society stories, and this is fascinating. I think ...

Okay, I'll give you a line-by-line (or almost) review, because I have time. Here goes. First Story First off, i really liked this. It was well written, easy to understand ...

How2EataRhesus: 1. The Fray- How To Save a Life 3. Coldplay- Viva La Vida 5. Pink- Who Knew 7. Bananaphone!!!! LilyJamey: 3. Good Charlotte- Boys and Girls 20. Rick Springfield- ...

This is really good. I love all of the comparisons, and can really visualize a person sitting down trying to describe this. I really only have one critique: You say ...

Okay, first off, *writewatiwant*: 12. Where'd You Go- Fort Minor 17. Everytime We Touch- Cascada 20. It's My Life- Bon Jovi Mercury616 and Lilymoore, I have nothing for you. Sorry! ...

Oh I want to read that too! Right now I'm reading the Vampire Diaries, the second one. My friend gave it to me, and it's not bad.

Oooh I love Shania Twain. Not so much Jesse Mcartney though. The rest I don't know. So... 6/10. 1. Desolation Row- My Chemical Romance 2. Emergency- Paramore 3. New Soul- ...