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Chapter 02 Kelly: “Wake up Tim! We’re getting late for school”, these are almost usual words that comes out of my lips when I get out of my room in ...

Hi! Well, your story was a little weird and I would you've put it into general fiction, I think posting it in fantasy will be better. I don't know what ...

That is great, really a great one. It was so natural and everything was in a very good flow! But I liked it most because of the reason of the ...

I agree with smashles. You start your poem with one separate line and then there is three line para. Also, another para is four lined and you end the poem ...

Yes! Petals are too dark I think, I think petals should be lighter and you should make background fade. I don't use photoshop much but for fade effect I use ...

It is nice, but the publishing part, I doubt that. It is your choice, and this poem is good too but still you should have a better portfolio.

It is just great, I don't have any other comment. This is great, keep it up. And thanks for posting such a nice thing over here.

As "thegirlandthepen" has already described almost everything I would not go in whole details. But there is one thing that I always notice in your writings. See, when you put ...

Great! Your work is always like this, different. I liked it this time too. But there is one thing that I would say. See, at the end of your story ...

Good work! There are some typing errors in your writing though. Read it once again and I think you will be easily able to point them out. It is catchy ...

Nicely written, but read the third last line. If I'm right there is a typing error.

There are some things that I would recommend you to edit over here. Instead of Dark clouds hover above my head You can use "Clouds are dark, over my head" ...

Poem is good and emotions are well expressed, but there is one line that bothers me. I thought we were friends Until the world's end "Until the world's end" seems ...

How does it seem now? I've Changed it as first Chapter 1

Well, now when everybody says that is is no good for first chapter and it needs description I think I should also arrange time for that. I will convert this ...