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Yeah, this drawing is really crazy :D --but there's one thing I didn't mention about it. I didn't just draw it for my art class, but I actually won 100 ...

Hey, this is something I did for my art class--It's just a pencil drawing. What I like about this is that the guy is straight up ugly, and it totally ...

I love the style. It is so neat! I would really like to see you do another one. :D

I really liked it too. And I like your imagery--It's awesome just the way it is...please don't change it. Sometimes things need to be changed, and then some times things ...

[I just threw this together. Tell me what needs help. ] Mrs. Foster slid the white potatoes into the oven and closed the door. She pulled off the thick oven ...

[Know what I hate about this story? It makes no sense until the very end. Is that too late?] VII Aleesha had a craving for a burger. And a pizza. ...

[This part has been so tough to write :x Let me know what you think--if you think anything :D ] V Students in black gowns swarmed under the bright stadium ...

[There are four parts left, and it's killing me :cry: Say what you think :roll: ] IV The mall was decorated with signs announcing back to school sales. It was ...

Your introduction is really interesting, and it'll be neat to see what happens next. If you want any advice, I think you put too many "had"s in the last paragraph. ...

Wow... That was so sad :( But it was so good! :D I really liked it. I like your descriptions; they're so crisp. And I like how the time in ...

***A million thank-yous for telling me about the dialog. I redid it, fixed the really bad spots, and the revised version is posted. As for the clichés, I’m keeping them ...

***A million thank-yous for telling me about the dialog. I redid it, fixed the really bad spots, and the revised version is posted. As for the clichés, I’m keeping them ...

Just a note: This story is going to toggle between the real and unreal. It's because each chapter is like a snap shot. It's a quick first impression. A photo. ...

The characters are described well, and the scene is easy to visualize. You have all of the imagery stuff down, but what strikes me as slight problem is the plot. ...

I think it's really neat how you compared Kerry's relationship with this Dale guy to an Ivy plant. It really got the point across of how much he really dug ...