charcoalspacewolfman

Well it's a bit preachy. The whole time I was thinking, "plastic does biodegrade, just not as fast as other stuff." So while I would normally be happy to suspend ...

As per your request, I'm here reviewing your story. There's a lot of grammatical errors and spelling errors you need to work on. Others have already pointed this out, I'm ...

Hey, this sounds like a pretty good action scene except for a couple things. It reads like you're typing very fast and don't stop to edit. While in the first ...

Well it's short. I like how it's essentially talking about one significant thing in the character's life and basically leaving the future open to what may come. It's not all ...

I'm mildly disappointed this isn't a how-to tale. However, your brief pointer to use silver was helpful and we'll commission a silversmith to help rid our town of our own ...

Yes, the unicorn should've definitely specified what type of pure virgin it wanted...I found it really funny when they couldn't find any virgins in town. I liked this half of ...

First of all, you need to separate your paragraphs more. As in there shouldn't be these huge blocks of words that contain a bunch of stuff then another block that ...

First let me say i really like 100 word stories better than 50 word stories. These were really nice, kinda quaint. I love how the sentences are mostly short, to ...

Well, after trotting through a few stories in the romance section, I found something I actually like...which is this story. Or whatever you'd call this. It sounds like something you'd ...

So my initial reaction to this is it's kinda creepy and sad, but pretty good. You made a couple mistakes (some obviously intentional) like I think you may have changed ...

Alright, this does have a few typos. As a general rule, it’s discouraged to use digits in writing unless they’re really long numbers and will take forever to write out ...

I thought it was really good. I could almost feel your character’s pain and terror. You have pretty good description, very visual and visceral, and the dialogue is well-done. There ...

I really enjoyed the voice of this story. It’s kinda like it’s overloaded with private eye detective story cliches, like, “It was the beginning of a hundred romances” and “His ...

OK, so at first I thought this might be kinda lame, but your description about it being the worst thing you’ve ever written piqued my interest. It’s flipping hilariious. I ...

And to think, if Norm had just stayed awake when they went in and remembered the deal with the crumbs, he would’ve made it and your main character would never ...