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Hey Blackbird, I defintley didn't get the allegory aspect of the story, but it does draw you in well with an interesting and unusual character. The action is good with ...

Hey Hannah! I agree with Stella's grammar corrections, but otherwise the story reads very well and you've got a great set-up. The one trouble is you don't really explain why ...

Hey Ziggiefred! First off, this is a good story with good action. I read through some of the other comments and agree with what others said about the dialogue: you've ...

Hey Kylan, I really like how you wrote about this. This story has a great rhythm and style and you do a nice job of combining enough context with great ...