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Thank you all for the comments. First of all, every single run-on is intentional. The idea is that the main character is not in the most stable place mentally and ...

The idea was to be highly repetitive, and I didn't want any specific character with this. It was more of a style experiment than anything.

I think it is quite good however what does 'first drink' really represent. Is it the first exposure to alcohol or is it the first drink that causes your emotions ...

Once I've written something more solid about the character, I will definitely add it here, and probably include bits and pieces of this within that. I haven't done a good ...

Thank you. :) I'll be sure to, especially anything like this.

It's a nice description and a fairly interesting take on alcohlism, but I must argue whether that first drink is really that special for anybody who drinks. I mean, considering ...

Thanks for the suggestions. :) I'm not sure how much more I'm going to do with this... Unless I completely rewrite it, I might just decide that it's too frustrating ...

the reference to the anti-drug campaigns. why would they joke that their loved one looked like a crack addict? Not to get overly defensive or to automatically assume that you're ...

"We face "why are you so upset? I'm not this upset," as though *his*nieces and nephews have more of a right to be sad than we do." (I added the ...

Thank you both for the lack of critique. =) This was written mostly from personal experience - my father was diagnosed with leukemia when I was eight years old and ...