cassie17

Thank you for this critique. However, I don't believing I'll be posting anything on YWS from here on out. In fact, I won't return to the website. If one of ...

When you sing, the world listens on bated breath. We’re all waiting for you. Don’t you realize the admirers you have? We all stop the world stops to know your ...

Waiting and clicking on titles that sound promising— “Hope,” “Love,” “World,” “Life,” --but aren’t. For I’m tired of dark depressing poems that make me want to tear my hair out ...

He was brought here on sunday. He CAME on a Sunday sounds better...please capitalize Sunday in this line and the next. It's a day of the week, not an ice ...

Very true. ---------------- The person below me is replying from a laptop.

Hello! Please make sure you do 2 reviews for every piece that you post on YWS--keep a 2:1 ratio. This poem really confused me...make sure that you have a central ...

Hi, Lizzifer! Flutter Flutter Little heart why are the first three words capitalized? I think it is okay to have the flutters capitalized, but I don't think there is any ...

Hi! I do like the edit much better. I only have one problem and it's with the last line: to unlock my pressuring cuff? Mostly, I don't like the word ...

This was very hard for me to read. I would suggest reading up on grammar, punctuation (especially around dialogue!) and where to start new paragraphs. I could go through the ...

Hello! The meaning behind this poem was very nice, hmm? Yes. Very good--reminds me of something I saw on Oprah a few days back :) First off, I'd like to ...

Great job! I'm not going to point out the punctuation problems, etc., since that's already been done, but here goes: What I liked: I liked right in the beginning, you ...

In addition to the topics already posted, I would include like a writing technique lesson--as in, going over "show, don't tell", what makes a good description, etc. Also, when starting ...

you get an empty birdcage -inserts coin-

This is great. I'm not going to be really nit-picky because that's already been done. I just wanted to say that I was reading this article on Oprah's website about ...

I really like this! Of course, I'm a fan of no-punctuation pieces, and this one was fast and quick, but at the same time slow (in a good way!) and ...