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A few things. 1. Run this through a spell-checker, and then re-read it yourself several times. "Except", not "accept"; "you're", not "your"; "moving" would be better style than "movin". I ...

Long ago when the world was still young, there was no light and all was darkness. The many different races of creatures could never tell the days apart. To them ...

A cool twist of the Siren myth! Though one must ask what kind of things she's growing in that garden of hers. :D "Smelt" should be "smelled"; "smelt" means to ...

Oh my goodness! Hahaha, you made my day. :D I don't think I laughed this hard at a story since I read "The Interruption", which had one of the most ...

Interesting, though on closest inspection if one wafts the wind around this story, one gets the subtlest smell of cheesiness. I suppose what I'm trying to say is that this ...

Excellent story! I read of a mother who would put the contents of her infant daughter's diaper into her IV, and then keep a blog about her sick kid. I ...

Boom! Bang! Things happen! Things that affect the character's entire life! And there's absolutely no context! Bang! other words, this is not a story. It's a clip from the middle ...

There is a surprising amount of insight in this story. I don't know if it can actually happen that a person becomes irrationally angry at everything due to grief, but ...

Let me describe my approximate thought process as I read this. "Ooh, a new poster in the Fantasy forums. Let's see what they've got. *clicks on story* Nice opening sentence. ...

Very good, I like this story. *like* Though it isn't a story as such but more of a character sketch / scene, it still does get some feelings across. Can't ...

In four words: good premise, bad execution. I was a little bit surprised, actually, given that the last story I reviewed by you was really good. This story is not ...

... I'm getting a feeling that this is a delusion on Darrel's part. Me being me, I habitually see into works a bit (or perhaps a lot) deeper than the ...

Mmmmm, alright, alright, I can see the connection here. When I posted that song, I intended for people to write a story that follows the same tonal/emotional pattern as the ...

Oh golly, I wish I had a richer vocabulary for this review. To quote someone, Jagged I believe, "We have not been given the words necessary." As you know, I ...

Well, the first thing I'll say is that the prose flows extremely well - like a poem, almost. Like Azila in her review, I noticed that the emotions also flow ...