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"Three-pronged"? :P I shall leave the grammar pickings-apart and the spelling crossings-out to the other, more capable reviewers of this site, and instead dive into the meat of the story. ...

Catain touched two fingers to the nose of her large horse, pushing firmly. In response, Mistbreath whinnied softly and the girl allowed herself a smile. [Why "allowed"? Is there a ...

This is my first story on YWS, so be nice :P Haha. Here goes: Is this what death feels like? Kerenza had thought it happier, or more carefree. Rolling over ...

This is for the Magic Realism contest! I whistled slightly , looking out the mouth of the cave. A flicker of light came from there, but the area around me ...

Apologies for getting back to this so late. I wanted to re-review the edited version, to see now if it made more sense to me. As with my previous review, ...

I'll start off by saying that this is very well written in terms of quality of prose, and the characters are quite nicely developed. The first scene was interesting and ...

Whatever doubts I may have had at the beginning, they all scattered like clouds from a warm, shining sun: the village before me was in dire trouble, with none to ...

Goddamn. Every time I sit down to try and review one of these things, I just can't make myself say anything bad about them. This is weird because I usually ...

Umm.... Not to be mean or anything, but I read this somewhere else on the Internet a year ago (4chan to be precise). This is a pretty famous urban legend.

Great short story! You particularly excelled at creating your characters. I'm not positive whether the MC (I'll just call her that, since we don't find out her name) is bitter ...

I largely disagree with this article. "Talking heads" are not at all bad if you can write the dialogue well enough. I do enjoy reading the occasional work that's thick ...

Well, I've still got a lot of questions, but I'm going to back down for a while and judge this chapter on its own merits. If I turn off the ...

I'm so confuuuuuuused! You are giving us so much information and so many names, but it's all very fragmented. I can't wrap my mind around what's going on. It almost ...

This is a summary/synopsis of the previous chapters. [...] He finds an anomaly on a planet called Zeyaethay. He talks it over with his sister Crane and decides to check ...

Hmm. I thought this was going to be a fantasy novel, so when I read talk of multiverses, I was a little bit surprised. You should be careful with introducing ...