captaindomdude

Well, it was poem, I'll give you that. I agree with the person above me. Your rhyming felt a little forced, like you didn't rhyme because it fit the poem, ...

Not much to say other then to agree with the person above me, very excellent work. I do say I like how uncensored your writing is. There is nothing wrong ...

An excellent work. I don't know if this is reflecting your actual feelings or just a story, but either way, I enjoyed it. You portrayed it in a way that ...

Wow! Excellent work, you did an amazing job at writing this. It was fun and a light read, perfectly done. You described without boring your reader, and you kept things ...

It was a decent little story, and there weren't any extremely obvious grammar errors. However I had some issue with how you wrote it. At the beginning, that first paragraph, ...

I like the way you wrote it, it was professional, and the way you portray the idea makes it sound original. I didn't find any other grammar errors besides the ...

Wow...the pain and emotion in this story is really there. This was a very dark piece, but you portrayed it well, and I feel sorry for the little girl. I ...

WOAH!!! Surprise ending! Very, very well done, I can honestly say I didn't expect that one. Great job on it, these last few chapters were nicely done. What else can ...

I honestly have to say that this one surprised me, and in a good way. I enjoy reading good old fashioned zombie survival and post nuclear stories as much as ...

Once again, amazing work. I'm seriously enjoying your writing, I honestly feel like I am reading something by an extremely experienced author. Your imagery is just right, your plot is ...

Honestly, I feel like you did a decent job with this. Chapters one, two, and three had the plot progressing absurdly quickly, but otherwise it was okay. Your description of ...

Well, if you wanted to portray your character as an asshole, you suceeded in that regard. I enjoyed the complete utter disrespect he showed to everything around him, as if ...

I....I don't even know how to describe the amazingness I just read. That was fantastic. Truly. You have a truly original plot. You have truly amazing characters. The setting you ...

Much better, your portrayal of the main character is greatly improved from the last chapter. She shows much more emotion, and I get a much better idea of what kind ...

Enjoying the story so far, you are progressing and portraying the story very well, and I find myself wanting to know more of the story. What's going on, who were ...