captain.classy

All done! Thanks for the request! Classy

Heya JSPike! Classy here, as requested. Let me start off by saying you have a wonderful voice. Your descriptions are all so poetic and wonderful, I just want to read ...

I really like this. You seem to be able to explain your surroundings, which is something I can't do with my story. I am writing one similar to this, similar ...

I would suggest learning one a day. Maybe finding the definition in the morning, learn it, and use it in every day life. That way you can get a feel ...

First Person I like first person if you are writing fantasy and action stories. Lets face it, with these stories, the romance is not the main part. By using first ...

Branch from the cliches. Love letters, foreign lovers, new kid moves in, deaths in the family, saved from a tragic accident. All of these things gross me out. When you ...

I really like this. It is probably the best poem I have read all day. I want to comment on your structure. At first I liked it, but as I ...

So short, so short. I think you have a good base for something larger here. In the title, you explain that you are finally you. but you don't really explain ...

Woah, this is so interesting! There was a town meeting that night. I was young, only sixteen. Wow random. This doesn't flow very well. I think you shouldn't explain what ...

Hmm, I don't really have much to say about this. I have no idea where you are going, what you are talking about, and you have no sign of a ...

Hmm... this is very interesting. I would just like to know how he found her? I mean if she doesn't even know where she is, how would he know? I ...

I definitely like this better than the children's story you were inspired by. The only thing I have to say was that in the beginning, you say 'abandoned by its ...

I want to like this poem, but I have no idea what it means. All of the lines make no sense to me. I don't know how to pick anything ...

Haha, this is so cute! The only nit-pick I have is that towards the end, you use 'why' way too much. It throws off the flow, made me go back ...

Shouldn't you say in the beginning "how small the watermelon seed is right now?" Because you don't plant a baby watermelon and it grown into a big watermelon. I really ...