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Re: Soldiers Blind
If looks could kill, I wish soldiers blind. I wish for our flag To shield their eyes from everything they’re fighting for. It’s not the battle we should be afraid ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: To The Late
Hiya! Classy here Yah I'm confused about the worm part. For people who have never read the play, it makes no sense and just seems weird. But, don't change it, ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: The Vampire Twins
Hiya! You know, I usually look the other way at vampire stories, but I quite liked this. It doesn't seem like you're taking the, "Oh I'm a sweet teenage vampire ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: YWS April 2010 Stats
Yah I read this! Yay for Chrome!
May 3, 2010 -
Re: hey i am new here
Welcome to YWS! I will be looking out for your postings for sure! PM me if you need a friend of a friendly reviews. If you ever need a review ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: Soul Eater
Hiya! I like this idea. This really isn't a beginning of a story, it's kind of like something you'd see on the back of a book. The summary. It invites ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: Classy Reviews [open]
Bump.
May 3, 2010 -
Re: Waiting for the Breeze - intro
Hiya! So I thought this was a good piece of writing, but isn't really a short story. It seemed more like two character profiles pushed into one block of writing. ...
May 3, 2010 -
Re: the box chapter one
Hmm, I'm not really sure what to say about this. First, you should really separate your work into paragraphs. If you look at other stories, you should see that there ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Fate Screaming
Hiya! Classy here to review. This was very touching. I think the idea is brilliant! I really don't have much criticism. I think you might have rushed things a bit, ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: An Extraordinary Encounter
Hiya! Classy here for a review. Let's get started. What I really like about this piece is so realistic it is. Most teenage girls are like this: obsessive, controlling, all ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Runner (ch.1)
Hiya! Classy here, let's get started. So this story is very interesting. It would be even more interesting if there weren't so many grammatical errors. Try reading this out loud ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Home
Hiya! Classy here. I wouldn't categorize this as a short story. It has no plot or dialogue. It seems more like a personal essay or something like that. It seems ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: The Knight's Secret (2 of 2)
Hey Rosey! Of course I liked this, I mean who wouldn't? Dragons, tension, great dialogue, it has everything I love. The only thing that bothers me is that you open ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Summer Camp
[Rose] "A camp out? Oh but my hair'll get all salty," I whined. "But... it seems fun. I wonder how we'll do it?"
Apr 28, 2010
