canislupis

Hi guys! Thanks for the reviews! Boon: Thanks! If you have anything for me to review, tell me!!!!! Conrad: I see what you mean. The original story was almost three ...

Thanks guys! I'll think about the stuff you said. Thanks for the reviews! Oh, and interesting idea aout the fore-shadowing. I might have to try that. ;) See ya around! ...

Hi Azila! Thank you, that was really helpful. I think I'll fix some of the stuff right away, so I can't get out of it later. :) About the 'I ...

Thanks for the review! By the way, I have just finished the rest of this story. I decided to turn the main character into an elderly widow, instead of my ...

Thanks! I'll try an edit for the repetative stuff, as well as the typoes. ;) I did want her to be vain, and hopefully that will become more apparent in ...

And about the storey/story thing: I'm pretty sure it can be spelled either way -- maybe I should change it anyway? Yeah.... Like I said, I think it can be ...

Oh, Canis, I'm confused as to why there are two quotes at the bottom, was that a mistake or something? Ehem, :oops: Um.... Yes, that was a mistake. :( I ...

Haha. Another good point. By the way all, I have done some editing. ^_^ It is pretty different, and hopefully it's better. XD Thanks!

Thanks Azila! This was really helpful. :) I'm gonna go through it a do some more major editing, but I just wanted a few more reviews first. :) 2. Spacing. ...

Wow, thanks everybody! I'll get to work on editing this as soon as possible. (Which might be difficult, since it is EXACTLY the right length now.. lol ) Thanks again! ...

Hi! I really like this version. Blizzard seems to have a bit more personality, and the Cliches have been toned down and made beleilveable. One negative thing I did notice ...

Thanks Azila! I'm entering it in the Pierce County contest, which I guess you wouldn't know about. Its sponsored by my library system, and there are cash prizes. :) Thanks ...

Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Fireweed: thank you for the enormously helpful reivew. I do agree about the cliched bits of his dialogue, But im not sure how to make him say it without ...

I really enjoyed reading this book.... But everyone knows I love rabbits.. (next to wolves of course) So this might be a biased oppinion.

I didn't really like it. The plot seemed cliche to the extremes, the writing style was dull... It was just really really hard to get through.