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Oh, Yeah I see that. I didn't mean to say paddock, but since I was really tired.... :D Anyway, I was saying that they probably wouldn't just let the horse ...

Thanks! Any suggestions on how to smooth out the beginning?

I see. :D Well, it might be plausible, but I think to make it more beleivable, you might want to take out the part with other stallions in the herd. ...

Hey, thanks azila. I'll get to the errors when I get this stupid cast off. :) About the paragraphs, I do agree that they are huge. Thanks for the tip!

Perhaps it is a bit repetative, but you did get feeling across and you accomplished what you set out to do pretty well. Other than that, I agree with what ...

Ha ha! Azila will get the joke :) Thank you for the review.

Hmmmm, guess not...... I'll be working on the next chapter then.......

Oh man! I was hoping you wouldn't kill Samantha..... It's all pretty much been said, but this is definitely a very suspensefull story. Emotions are clearly portrayed as well. Good ...

OMG!!!!!!!! I can't beleive this. Very well written, but the most meandering and random subject matter I have read in a while. From the second paragraph on, I was laughing ...

Hmmm, interesting idea. I think it might need a bit of work though. Actually, the whole thing needs to be checked for grammar issues, since you seem to have a ...

Thanks for the review. I'll definitely keep your suggestions in mind. About the first time, I was having her look at her reflection, but maybe it wasn't clear enough...... I ...

Thanks for the PM! Description is good, melodrama generally isn't. redundance isn't good either :) If I were to give an example, I would show you the first sentence: I ...

Wow. Very long to post just in one bit. The whole thing needs a grammar edit, but choco got alot of the things I would have pointed out. You are ...

Ummmm...... ok. What contest was this for? if you were trying to acheive complete confusion, good job. :)

Yes, I agree with azure. As it is, I can't wait to read more of this! The one part I didn't like was the fact that I've been working on ...