camusic

Good beginning, beautiful writing. Good word choice really paints a picture in the reader's mind, a very divine image. Honestly, I'm just kind of awestruck, like who knew bees were ...

I love how everything is described, fun to read. Very interesting you grabbed my attention. “What doesn’t feel right?”The big words. Need a space there, I’d suggest making all those ...

Aww her calls her princess that’s so cute!! You can definitely tell a girl wrote this cause I mean how many guys like this do you know? Instead of saying ...

I enjoyed reading this so much please continue it!! You should have them meet somewhere randomly in the summer or have one of her friends set her up with him!! ...

Love it!! The part where you talked about Lord Tiernan and how he hated carriages was a tiny bit confusing. If it were me I would say something like the ...

Well written, as much as I love this site that is uncommon. I loved how you started with a rose and then pointed out how it was nothing more than ...

Loved the beginning, great way to start it. I was confused on the part where Aquila swooped you may want to add a little hint that he’s flying. (He is ...

Instead imitating the teacher I’d put mocked just so it’s more clear what she’s doing but that’s probably just me. Another thing that’s probably just me is when she’s like ...

Deep, I love compairison of a limp it gives a good visual for the poem. I also love how it’s with every step, something that you’ll never forget. The part ...

Verry interesting I'd love to see where it would go if you were to continue it. Might want to come up with a good hook at the beginning before the ...