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Re: Go Well (or Dead Friends)
Got your message and logged on immediately. You may not see this so I will email you my thoughts on the poem. Though I suspect this poem may be something ...
Dec 4, 2011 -
Re: Crossing the Railroad Tracks
No. I couldn't find a hidden meaning, because it wasn't hidden. It was glaring.
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: I Believe
It's work of this nature that leads me to no longer pay the 'Featured' section any attention. Because, seriously, this isn't great. I don't believe this has left anyone inspired ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: Final Report
Thank you Joshua, I have read some of your work and I will write an appraisal of something of yours soon.
Nov 16, 2011 -
Re: Final Report
Though I wasn't a Rebel or a Weasel from the Underground, I once despaired totally of having a sensible place in society. My hopelessness was so thorough that thoughts of ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Concealed
You need to put in a hint of conflict, foreshadow something bigger so we keep reading. You lost me pretty quick
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: No Heartbeat Detections
I'm not a big fan of this simple rhyme scheme and shallow metaphor. But it seems to work on some level so well done.
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Green Flowers
That's nice. I like the addition of the picture too. I hate war, you can say that. That's something you are definitely alloud to hate
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Disconnection
I am, a black satin ribbon twisted into a smile on the cold cement A whisper at midnight, between cupped hands and flashlit lovers Like the moment I realised a ...
Nov 9, 2011 -
Re: The Escape of Adam Seth
hmm, not bad. Not bad at all. It wasn't good either. In fact, it's to early to tell because this is so short.
Nov 2, 2011 -
Re: Lerra
I really didn't expect to see this sort of thing when I signed up for this website. It's intelligent and well constructed. This reminds me a little of 'American Pyscho.' ...
Nov 2, 2011 -
Re: Story told in Colors
*Yawn* really didn't do much for me, I'm afraid.
Nov 2, 2011
