bryan

This isnt bad. Actually it was pretty good for the most part. I think it could be a little longer though, you should elaborate more on the points you list ...

I liked this. good job overall. I think it could use some touching up though because it's kind of vague and a little bland. I got the general impression of ...

Hey this seems like a real good book you got coming along. I dont think many people review it yet though because they probably don't understand the intensity or complex ...

Great poom! i really liked it. Im going to piggyback off the first person that reviewed your poem. There could be some grammatical improvements like: wounds bigger than should be ...

This was funny: The hunchback lady behind the front desk says that she’ll personally drop kick me into the pond out front if she catches me just waiting here again. ...

Right from the start i was drawn to reading this, and thats one of the most important things a writer should know how to do. You have to be able ...

This part had to be my favorite. Inside out. Hack it out with a knife. All your pain and sufferings. And all will be left will be your stoned heart, ...

I loved this. It was written, or maybe just the way i read it, with a poetic sense and it was really interesting to read. Loved it. At first you ...

Great job and way to be creative and original. Not alot of people still do alot of poetry that include ryhming but still are advanced and a quick tip, dont ...

I cant even describe how good that was i mean really! --"Last nightI think I dreamt of cancer. I dreamt of my bones emptying onto the floor, like they were ...

Great poem. I liked the first passage "I sip tea while night rain erodes your dignity -- yes there is pride in poverty like hanging menwe cherish our threads" i ...

Hey this is some good stuff! i especially loved this part: [“W-what are you trying to do to me?” He stuttered. He remembered the animals and talk of the other ...

First off this was intense i loved it. Especially this part: He fired the gun, for the first time, making him pushed backwards due to the opposing forces. The witch ...

Nice work but a few pointers. Well i make so many mistakes i tend to see others pretty easily you know. Ah first thing grammer "You are very handsome and ...

Im a fan already. i havent really followed this novel but jumping into the middle of it makes me want to start from page one. It could use some more ...