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Well between the end of last chapter and the beginning of Cody's part in this it's easy to assume nothing special happened after the guy in the class room shot ...

WARNING: Do not read this until you have read chapters one and two: topic53806.html I don't like the cliffhanger as much in this one but it will suffice. Still a ...

Very good, you really painted the picture well. And good luck with your story!

That was very nice and well-written! Sorry about whatever happened to you in real life...i hope it gets better. :(

Do not proceed if you have not read chapters 1 & 2: After this, I'll be posting weekly to bi-weekly because I know all this at one time can be ...

I like how you introduced the "Monster" and revealed at the end that it was cancer. I love when I read/watch something that has an ending that makes you look ...

“Please pardon the interruption, but Mr. Favinger, if you could please come to the office immediately. Thank you.” Usually, in the event of a lock down, the person over the ...

I'd say this is more like a novel but that doesn't matter anymore because I'll just be reviewing more and posting new topics from now on. I posted it twice ...

I wanna say something about my comma usage because it'll be obvious to some in this chapter. I put a comma where I want you to pause. If I'm saying ...

Oh lol well it'll be like that all the way through. Best to just pretend that it's not on Disney Channel...more of a PG-13 movie or something. :wink: I'll probably ...

Well I guess I'll just have to update my thread because I'm getting an error message when I try to post the next chapter. It says I have to give ...

Haha, thanks Trish. You were right about everything. I altered all the things you commented on at least a little bit. Thanks for the review and chapter 2 will be ...

Ahhh okay, you're right. It's not a problem. Thanks :) And hi Writersdomain!

Hi June, thanks for the quick reply and welcome. I just submitted my story in the fanfiction section, but when I looked at it, the first line of each paragraph ...

RATED PG-13 Chapter 1 OP: Chapter 2 OP: Hi guys, This fanfiction goes under the suspense/drama category. It is based off of the show "The Suite Life of Zack and ...