break~my~heart

beautiful, beautiful poem. Loved it completely :D Nothing really to critique here...... Except, what's with the numbers?? Only thing I didn't understand completely. Gosh gold star! ( I felt like ...

Beautiful. Simply gorgeous. I can't believe you wrote that in seconds!!! Turning green over here Lol (I think we both know why) :wink: And I think we both were counting ...

ooh, I liked that alot!!! It was so cool that it was spanish too!! You're really good at writing. Keep posting stuff so I can read! Lol :D Darn.... This ...

ugh giving reviews is the worst part :( well, here we go: Overall, it was a good poem. It had potential....but, it was kinda just like every other emo, hurting, ...

yay! i love reviews (weird, huh?) ok, here'r the links: Prologue: Killer (edited) Just a Sunset with you in other fiction.... also, be extremely harsh :wink: thanks, til then... XoXo~AsH

wow. just wow... that was purely amazing! there is not much to critique except the third line of the first stanza. it says something about classical music, however, that is ...

wow this is really good! i dont think i have aything that i want changed... unless maybe making the suspense last a little longer. all in all, its very good. ...

ok this kinda sucks :( ok this really really sucks lol do your worst ps: sorry it's so long!! ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

She stalks. She springs. And with her brings A breath of midnight air. This verse is doom for rhythm of the poem so far... With prey in jaw She turns ...

My Skin It disguises my feelings. It hides my heart. It covers the nerve you're killing, and sets me apart. Why have you done this? It's almost a sin. Right ...

ps: as you can see, i'm not exactly the best at giving a review. :roll: sorry about that. lol

ok, i'm new on here, so i feel kinda weird critiquing someone else but i'm supposed to, so here goes: :wink: the way you described the island in your poem, ...

thank you everyone :) :) :)

OW mean OUCH! like if you hurt yourself...you might say it :) and OH is probably what you meant to say in your poem unless Finland was hurting you. lol ...

that was honestly one of the best poems I've ever read! ugh here I go again...I can never find anything wrong with the stuff I read! anyways, it expressed what ...